Mindful Ramblings
Published on February 26, 2004 By Unfairman In Misc
I just rewrote this poem, from the skeleton of one I wrote in High School. I liked the message, but my writing skills were pretty shoddy back then, and it didn't flow for shit, so I rewrote it. I thought it was kind of fitting, considering out current situation. It's called Battle Cry

Battle Cry

I sit in shock up on the hill
We've won the battle, yet I feel no thrill
As my newfound brother lay before me, silent...
Never to speak again.
I am a man...I cannot cry.

I've answered Our Nation's call to arms
I came over excited, determined to inflict harm
Upon this nation of evil doers.
I've done it, and I've done it well
I am a man, I cannot cry.

The wind blows across this bloodied field
We maimed and killed them, but they did not yield.
We're trying to help these people
But they keep attacking us
I am a man, I cannot cry

The hand raises up of a man I once knew
A solitary pillar on a backdrop of blue
Before I get there, his hand falls
Never to raise again
But I am a man, and I will not cry

The wind cries for us
All these men, this dust
Because I am a man, and I cannot cry

*In retrospect, this poem still doesn't flow, and it's kind of juvenile, but I"m gonna post it anyway*


Comments
on Feb 26, 2004
Chris, it's interesting to revisit such writing isn't it? I come across a lot of old notebooks and it makes me realize why my 8th grade teacher thought i was suicidal. Poetry probably isn't meant for form or flow unless that's what you're going for. Most of it I do for me then seek a little validation by people cool like you who take the chance to read it. Poetry is the most unprofitable of printed press which is good and tragic at the same time I suppose...but then again, that kind of sums up my life at this point.

Good to see you're writing.
on Feb 29, 2004
This is a good poem. And definitely not juvenile!
on Feb 29, 2004
Thanks, Fawn. Of course, we are our own worst critics, and I still don't feel this is up to snuff. Maybe I'll just stick to prose